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diff --git a/src/_layouts/base.njk b/src/_layouts/base.njk
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@@ -39,7 +39,7 @@
   <header>
     <nav>
       <a href="/">Home</a>
-      <a href="/about">About</a>
+      <a href="/about">About Me</a>
       <a href="/blog">Blog</a>
       <a href="/resume">Resume</a>
     </nav>
diff --git a/src/about.njk b/src/about.njk
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--- a/src/about.njk
+++ b/src/about.njk
@@ -16,9 +16,8 @@ title: About
   <p><small><i>bellevue, washington across the water and a small critter.</i></small></p>
 </div>
 
-I'm programmer with a few years of industry software engineering under my belt, currently at AWS. I
-graduated from Utah State University in 2023 at 20 with a degree in CS and a minor in math. I live in Seattle with my partner
-and dog, Gus.
+I'm a computer programmer with a few years of industry software engineering under my belt, currently at AWS. I
+graduated from Utah State University in 2023 at 20 with a degree in CS and a minor in math. I live in Seattle with my partners and my dog.
 
 ### What I Do
 
@@ -29,13 +28,13 @@ and dog, Gus.
   <p><small><i>sourdough, and some lime scooters where they ought to be parked.</i></small></p>
 </div>
 
-Most of my days are spent designing, writing, and communicating about deep distributed software systems. A lot of it is plumbing.
-But every once in a while I find diamonds in the rough—those really deep technical topics that require the application of real theory,
+Most of my day is spent designing, writing, and communicating about deep distributed software systems. A lot of it is plumbing (I'm not a huge fan of this part, but for some reason it's the part that pays a lot and "has visibility").
+But every once in a while I find diamonds in the rough, deep technical topics that require the application of real theory,
 which somehow seem to go undiscovered.
 
-Those are the problems I chase. When I encounter them, I dive as far and work as hard as possible to uncover as much as possible. That often turns out to be a nothing-burger.
-But sometimes, underneath all the layers lies a tremendous find no one else would have caught. This part of my job is what I'm absolutely
-addicted to and get so much dopamine from, once that last puzzle piece clicks. It's what I've loved about computers
+Those are the problems I chase. When I encounter them, I work as hard as possible to uncover as much as possible. That often turns out to be a nothing-burger.
+But sometimes, underneath that tracing lies a <i>tremendous</i> find that, occasionaly, no one else would have caught. This part of my job is what I'm absolutely
+addicted to and get an insane amount of dopamine from. It's what I've loved about computers
 most of my life; finding needles in haystacks.
 
 I also love baking sourdough bread. I love taking long uphill runs at the end of a day in the dark of night. I love reading and obsessively learning as much as I can about, objectively,
@@ -54,12 +53,10 @@ At least, that's the dream. It has definitely not been smooth sailing up to this
 
 ### Beliefs
 
-I hate what capitalism has done to warp our tools into something that destroys and rots
-us. Devices that once made our lives a bit easier and pushed forward the frontier of science and math now watch us with as much detail as
-can be recorded.
+I hate what capitalism has done to warp our tools into something that destroys and rots us. Devices that once made our lives a bit easier and pushed forward the frontier of science and math now record every as much as can be recorded.
 
-AI is a peak example of this rot, used to justify ripping wealth and productivity from the laborer and pluck the creativity straight
-from their heads, while the most wealthy profit from cutting them out entirely.
+AI is the peak example of this rot, constantly used by capitalists to justify ripping wealth and productivity from the laborer and pluck the creativity straight
+from their heads, while they profit immensely from cutting them out entirely.
 
 But if you're here you're likely already aware of these issues and probably share similar views in which case I don't need to go any further...